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1 Review Thread on Mon Dec 13, 2010 4:20 am

This is my very first time writing my own story, feedback and critisism are welcome but please don't bash my stories.

Stories I'm working on:

[size=18]IN TIME CANNOT ERASE CHAPTER 6 PLEASE CLICK ON THE LINK TO VIEW THAT PICTURES I WORKED OVER FOUR HOURS ON FOR MY STORT THANX!!!!!

Time Cannot Erase
Ahsoka gets caught up in her dark past during a trip to Shili. She must accept the help of her master and friends and regain her family's trust before she can lead her village. If not Ahsoka will have to face her scared family history and deal with her problems alone. Is Ahsoka up to the task of leading her people into battle, or will the Tita's fall to the Lotux tibe, and can there ever be peace in the Tano family?

Drowning in Greed:
Anakin has been very busy on "meditative retreats" and solo missions. Ahsoka slowly begins to run out of things to do and stummbles across a competitive swim team who is more than happy to have her. But when the republic decides to remove the pool for more "war-like" purposes, Ahsoka tries to sway the senates decision. Meanwhile Palpatine tries to get Anakin to work in his favor. Will Anakin stay loyal to his padawan or will his attachment drive him to cause her more pain than intended?

Secret's of a Broken Heart
During a retreat to Naboo, Ahsoka accidentaly discover's the Anakin and Padme are in a relationship. Anakin wants nothing more than Ahsoka's forgiveness but will he be able to confess to his lies? When Padme is kidnapped Anakin finds that if he is ever going to save her, he needs Ahsoka's help. Can Ahsoka forgive her master or will their friendship along with Padme be put in jeporady?

Room for Love?
Obi-wan is assigned a second padawan named Jacen. Ahsoka feels as though she has been casted aside and must fight to mantain the respect she has earned. When Jacen starts developing feeling for Ahsoka how will Anakin react without seeming hipicritical of his relationship with Padme? Can Ahsoka put her jelousy aside and give Jacen a chance, or will their constant battle for dominance destroy the possibility of them being more than colleges?

pronunciation:
Tita (tee-ta)
Lotux (loe-tux)
Ahsoka's family members names will be here too



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2 Re: Review Thread on Mon Dec 13, 2010 5:23 am

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I like the second one, and the third, I liked that you used the name Jacen, with that please do not make him seem like a full on fool. But all in all these stories look like they are going to be great.

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3 Re: Review Thread on Mon Dec 13, 2010 8:07 am

Wow, I can't wait to read these!

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4 Re: Review Thread on Mon Dec 13, 2010 10:53 am

Wow! These sound like five star stories! yodagrin Whenever I get on fanfiction.net, these types are always my favorite to look up. These sound downright wonderful! Downright wonderful! yodasmile

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5 Re: Review Thread on Tue Dec 14, 2010 4:40 am

I LOVE LOVE LOVE it!!!!!!! VERY good! Can't wait for more! I had always thought what if Ahsoka is the princess of Shili? It's great! yodagrin

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6 Re: Review Thread on Tue Dec 14, 2010 5:38 am

Wow, this was great Ahsokasister! It was descriptive, and left us with a cliffhangar. Very nice job. Wink

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7 Re: Review Thread on Tue Dec 14, 2010 2:15 pm

I REALLY like it, Ahsoka!!!!!!! I can't wait for more! yodagrin shaak ti tano


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8 Re: Review Thread on Wed Dec 15, 2010 4:34 am

I LOVE it Ahsokasister! I feel soooooo bad for her! I can't wait for more! It's really good!


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9 Re: Review Thread on Wed Dec 15, 2010 9:00 am

Wow, I like! The training excersise was well written, and everything has been well decriped! I can't wait to read more!


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10 Re: Review Thread on Wed Dec 15, 2010 10:03 am

Ahsoka please read and review "Return to Innocence". Its a little like your "Time cannot Erase". I would love your opinion. Thanks Wink

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11 Re: Review Thread on Sun Dec 19, 2010 4:39 am

I love the new chapter! It's very good! Everything is very well written! Can't wait for more! yodasmile


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12 Re: Review Thread on Sun Dec 19, 2010 5:52 am

Tehe, I liked how Rasi fell out of the tree. I always love those scenes where they get knocked down. Laughing


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13 Re: Review Thread on Mon Dec 20, 2010 11:37 pm

Wow, I'm beginning to wonder how good Ahsoka is at lying........ Suspect LOL. Razz Anyways, nice chapter!


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14 Re: Review Thread on Tue Dec 21, 2010 4:03 am

I love it! I can't wait for more! I also can't wait to see what happened to Ahsoka's father! yodasmile


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15 Re: Review Thread on Fri Dec 24, 2010 2:49 am

Wow the description of the palace was great! Very Happy


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16 Re: Review Thread on Fri Dec 24, 2010 4:56 am

Yay! I love it! yodasmile yodasmile Can't wait for more! I always enjoy Ahsoka stories! You and Anakin (Naka) both have good ones! If I remember right, Doma has an Ahsoka story too. yodagrin


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17 Re: Review Thread on Sat Jan 01, 2011 10:41 pm

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Great story Ahsokasister Smile

18 Re: Review Thread on Sun Jan 02, 2011 1:15 am

Ok, I'm back Ahsokasister, sorry I couldn't read and review. I know what you mean by nonone reading your stories. My story only has a couple main readers/reviewers. Anyway, good pictures for chapter 6 and OH SNAP for chapter 7!!! Smile


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19 Re: Review Thread on Sun Jan 02, 2011 4:33 am

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I agree with grievous. though whatever that snap meant....

20 Re: Review Thread on Sun Jan 02, 2011 5:32 am

Oh, it's just an expression of mine. Basically it's like oh great, or good grief, or something like that.


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21 Re: Review Thread on Sun Jan 02, 2011 7:28 am

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okay, Razz

22 Re: Review Thread on Sun Jan 02, 2011 9:11 am

Oooooo! I love the new chapter!!!!!!! I'm looking forward to more! yodagrin


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23 Re: Review Thread on Sun Jan 02, 2011 9:16 am

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me too.

24 Re: Review Thread on Tue Jan 04, 2011 5:20 am

Wow, nice chapter.  I wonder where Ahsoka is though.....I'll guess we'll find out!


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25 Re: Review Thread on Tue Jan 04, 2011 5:23 am

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Yeah, great mystery to it, and I love the chapter Ahsoka.

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